Heather's Heist Reviews:

Chapter 4 Review

Nooooooooooo !
Mabel T-T ! Ada !!!

Why do this, Cali ! Why destroy my heart ! Heather better survive I tell you.

Anna was incredible as that monstrous force, barely comprehensible for the humans I guess. And that digestion scene. I usually don't like Vore and Digestion, but here it doesn't feel like smut, but rather an important element of the story.

It was always extremely well written, and I really like how you did this. I guess that's the proof of your mastery of the English language, well done !

Chapter 3 review :

Well, the first comeuppance has come, to a druglord if I'm not mistaken. Well done humanizing Ged by the way ! He seemed way less of a bastard here than before. It makes his fate much more gruesome.

Heather's plan was a little risky, in her place I'd have dropped the explosive on the other two on the rope, frankly. I do wonder what'll happen now, as I guess Anna will have noticed her.

Chapter 2 :

Le groupe vit bien.

Ged and Ren seems like they are absolute assholes, and I hope they'll get what they deserve before the end. Especially Ren, Ged sounds like a goon, she looks like a powerful monster.

Adelaide and Mabel are gentler but I can’t help but feel they are hiding something too. But then again, so does Haether !

Overall, Anna was simply spectucular. And she was sleeping all along ! That was really an awesome way to depict her monstrous size, which is truly tremendous it seems. And she hasn't really been standing or even moving for now...

See you next chapter !

Review of chapter 1 :

The characterization continues to be stellar. And I really like the slow burn about the giant inside. I have the feeling we won't see much of them, but when they'll appear, it'll be a momentous event ! I can't wait to see how the heist progress and see the story unfold... but I'll take my time savoring this tale !

Oh boy !
It is so well written I'm jealous !
The introduction of Heather is excellent, the gradual upping of the tension with the other members of the team and their clearly disfunctionnal relations is perfect. They all have a key part to play and I can't wait to see who'll betray who.
And the subtil worldbuilding is awesome. It really makes the story stand out to me... and that's just the Prologue!
I hope Hearher make it out alive and well !

(Spoilers for the ending!!)

Damn, this is a good read. You've done a great job of exploring the fantasy world really organically, and all the characters were really enjoyable, and believable too. The way you wove subtle exposition into character's internal monologues was masterful.

Heather was a really engaging protagonist, even after her betrayal - and it's consequences - I still found myself rooting for her to escape. Chapter 5 and the epilogue were a really nice surprise, and a great way of finishing the story off. Larissa was super cute for what little screen time she had overall, and the reveal at the end that she'd already interrogated and eaten Emma was titillating.

I don't feel for Ged and Ren, they had it coming. But poor Mabel and Adelaide. Don't get me wrong, it was super hot, but also super sad. Out of everyone they deserved their fate the least, I think. Especially seeing Mabel re-crippled by Anna's swallow, that was heart-wrenchingly well done. Ada only realising what had happened when the bulge of Mabel's body rolled past her is easily my favourite passage in the story. Their fate is especially sad to think about when Heather is hoping she'll see them safe afterward. Little does she know she's going home as the sole survivor.

Also, bravo on just on the way the story is written! You did a wonderful job laying out the plot, and your prose was beautiful. You have a great vocabulary. I had a really clear picture of what was going on most of the time, and you described things in detail while still remaining fairly concise.

It was also cool to read about Anna again, and learn more about the world you're putting together here. I hope you plan to continue writing stories within it, because it's super interesting, and the recurring characters are a blast.

10/10 Story, and an instant classic.